Great work everyone! I apologise that my response is too long…any feedback about whether I am on the right track or how to cut down my waffle would be greatly appreciated
This article outlines the dangers associated with tobacco use, and discusses different methods of intake. Firstly, I noticed a lack of references and authorship, so the reader is left unaware as to the context or purpose of the text. I would be interested to know who the author was and who the intended audience was, and also the references behind the stated statistics. This would be helpful in understanding the purpose of the text and also in critically appraising the information provided. Moving on...
The first point relates to cigarette smoking, and some statistics are given to demonstrate the harmful effects of this behaviour. Various comparisons are made between ciggarette smokers (note that no further clasification is given, eg. "a pack a day smoker") and non ciggarette smokers in terms of their morbidity and disease rates. Specifically, cigarette smokers experience worse health outcomes than do non smokers. The general trend presented is that quitting earlier is most favourable, and that quitting when older is still favourable, but less effective. In psychology, this is a technique frequently used in health promotions whereby the audience is firstly presented with an unfavourable consequence, and subsequently told that their change in behaviour WILL make a positive difference.
The next point relates to tobacco intake via cigar and pipe smoking. The author calls these “natural ways to quite smoking”. I have not heard of this terminology before so would be interested to know about this classification of “natural”. Perhaps it is in the absence of medication (in which case going cold turkey would also be considered natural) or whether it represents some lessened intake of tobacco (which arguably, is not really quitting smoking). I make this point because the word natural has pleasant and healthy connotations associated with it and it is used throughout the text. Furthermore, I am unsure whether someone who switches their daily cigarette intake to a daily cigar intake is actually “quitting” smoking. Moving on, the article identifies both cigar smoking and pipe smoking as natural ways of quitting smoking, which presents them in a positive light. It then goes on to demonstrate the harmful effects of cigar and pipe smoking, saying they are “less addictive” ( I would like to know more about this) than cigarettes, but making the concession “they are not completely safe” (newsflash!! hehe). Various statistics are provided to demonstrate that the harmful effects of this type of smoking are “nearly the same” as cigarette smoking. I would like to know whether any of these differences are statistically significant and how this has been determined, and whether specific diseases and things like frequency of smoking behaviour have been taken into consideration. Is the comparison in the final sentence comparing these pipe/cigar smokers with non smokers or with cigarette smokers? Seemingly the comparison is between pipe/cigar smokers but this is unclear.
The next point relates to spit and smokeless tobacco and labels them “other natural ways to quit smoking” and reports that smoke-related tobacco intake is the most harmful, and yet these smokeless methods are as addictive as cigarettes (how was this determined?). The author then goes on to list various health problems associated with the intake of smokeless tobacco, seemingly making comparisons between non-smokers and smokless-smokers (does that make sense?), but once again, this is unclear. Smokeless tobacco intake is presented as being less harmful than smoking tobacco intake, and yet the necessary statistical comparisons needed to make this inference are not offered. The proposed statement that smokeless intake of tobacco is less harmful than smoking intake of tobacco is not supported by a comparison in health outcomes with the smoking groups previously discussed.
The overall structure of the argument is logical, in that the author discusses tobacco intake in a supposed perceived descending order of harmfulness. The statistical comparisons are for the most part meaningless, as there is no evidence offered that cigar/pipe smokers experience better outcomes than cigarette smokers, or that smokeless-smokers experience better outcomes than cigar/pipe smokers. Overall, the article outlines the harmful effects of all types of tobacco use and says that as a group, tobacco users have worse health related outcomes than non-tobacco users. This claim, despite a lack of references, I believe to be accurate. The supposed grading of harmfulness remains unsupported by appropriate comparisons and in the absence of referencing I am unsure of the accuracy of this interpretation.
If the purpose of this article is to dispel the myth that these “natural ways to quit smoking” are actually particularly harmful, it may benefit from making some appropriate group comparisons, breaking down the perceived “natural” label rather than referring to it throughout the article, and offering non-tobacco quitting alternatives in a final paragraph.
Hey, good critique and good answer. You correctly point out that your answer is too long and therefore impractical for an interview situation but you did do a very good job of pointing out the key problems with this piece -
namely a lack of referencing, no clear details on who the author is, and no context for the statistics quoted which would be needed to assess the validity and further usefulness of their claims.
I have italicised and highlighted in red the sentence above in order to highlight the importance of summarising. I only realised this point was important after I wrote the sentence above but its clearly missing from many of the posts so far in this thread.
Summarising and paraphrasing are related but ultimately different terms. Paraphrasing is putting the meaning of something into your own words while summarising is identifying the main substance of a lengthy piece of information. It is useful in this sort of question to be able to summarise in one or two sentences what the article is trying to say and what the problems with the article are. My sentence above summarises the important criticisms, for example
What a lot of posters have done is paraphrase each of the sentences/paragraphs in turn (without actually summarising them) and then have gone on to critique those paragraphs. This is essentially a doubling up of information and it is why some of the replies are so long. A better way would be to summarise the major points, summarise the major critiques, and
then go on to nitpick details in your critical analysis. This is a hugely important communicative skill to develop with massive relevance for medicine. When presented with a lot of information you have to make sense of, its important to identify and summarise the major points in your first couple of sentences then go through the detail in order of most important to least important.
Going through the article in the order in which it is written helps you not to miss anything
but is relatively simple to do and does not give you the chance to show how well you can synthesise and interpret data.
That last bit was more general advice for the whole thread. To go on for this particular post I would mention, as Season has done, that its worth pointing out what this article has done well as well as what is not so good about it. You might perhaps make the comment that this article is likely not written for an audience of healthcare professionals which might explain some of its failings.
Similarly, when discussing things you'd like to look into, its worth considering summarising those things at the end. This is simply another method to avoid a 'nitpicking' response and instead give one that is structured and clear.
In fact this response only mentions one or two things that it'd like to know more about. Again, a clear and structured way to do this is as such:
the article makes the claim that xyz, but what is not clear is how x was determined, whether y was statistically significant or what the comparison group for z was. I'd need to know more about these issues before I could really gauge the usefulness of these claims - i.e. a summary.
Nevertheless this reply clearly demonstrates very good critical analysis skills, I don't think I have any suggestions for improvement there, they are quite simply very good. The area for improvement is presenting these excellent critical analysis skills in a clear and structured manner.